Wednesday, July 13, 2011

Will you tell me if you have an issue with any lines in this?

If it doesn't affect your meter, why not change it to 'Devil's draw'? Overall a nice cadence to your words as I read except for L2S1: 'fool dwelt'. How about: 'in cards a fool did dwell'? As to content, not a tarot guy so some else can expound there.

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